Workshop responses

I got a lot of good feed back on my rough draft. The people in my group were both very encouraging and gave my both encouragement and criticism. I learned that the key points of my essay seem to be getting across pretty well. The suggestions I got were to add more detail/description in places and to maybe add a little more analysis to some places. 

I really liked the workshop and can agree that some places I do need more details. I also am encouraged by my group's comments on my organization, because before the workshop I was not sure if that was working very well. I know I will need to go back through each section and add more detail, description and analysis before my essay is complete.